out of no where a dog was chasing me. iI think it was a pit bull. I keeped running I climbed a tree I was about 50 meters from school I accidentally dropped my bag the pit bull ate it.
I saw on the pit bulls tag her name was Lucy. 3 hours past i was starting to get tired i fell asleep and the pitbull ate me. I woke up in the pitbull stomach, I saw lots of people in the pitbull stomach, "hey I said to myself" "is the the girl called Lulu from my school that went missing?" 1 hour passed and the pitbull spued me up! and ran away. I guess i was safe and sound again!.
Hello Millie, wow, your blog keeped me on the edge of my seat. Well done. The thing I thought you could improve on was writing a little blurb about what you were going to write about. Apart form that you did so well.
ReplyDeleteHi Millie,
ReplyDeleteI really love how you have put in detail and a hook so I wanted to keep reading. I just wish you could of put capital letters after full stops. Do you know you wrote I wrong.
Aloha Kyla-Rose
Aloha Kyla-Rose.
hey millie,
ReplyDeletei love it how you described how far you where from school its just you accidently said ¨the¨ twice its ok its still really good By Dillyn.